Niche Blog Commentary #1- Fighting the Freshman 15
For this first draft of my blog post #1, I made many revisions to make the final draft. At first, my post was about how to fight the freshman '15 at Rowan University. I included a lot of information about Rowan, and different places to eat that are healthy. I also discussed different meal plans, and how to effectively use your Rowan Card to save money while staying healthy. I discussed how you can use your Rowan Card to buy groceries at Shoprite as well. I talked about many different topics, and decided that there was not just one single topic I was focusing on, which made it confusing to see the purpose of the blog. The first draft also did not include much of my own voice or opinion, but rather a lot of information being thrown at the audience. I decided to edit my blog to discuss one single topic: Finals. This second draft included a lot more of my own voice and opinion, as I discussed how to avoid stress eating during finals time. I was still able to include how to use your Rowan Card at Shoprite to buy healthy groceries during finals time. I believe my blog is much easier to read now, and is more interesting. It is also more relatable now that I am talking about a stressful time that a lot of students are going through at the moment.
Blog #1 Draft
Blog #2 Commentary- Meal Prep Like a Champ
For this blog post, I decided to add a few tweaks to make the post stronger. I believe my first draft was a good start, and I included a lot of pictures and text that made the post very interesting and exciting to read. However, at the end of my post, I offered other recipes you can use to meal prep, and included the hyperlinks to them. At the end of that, I included the whole website with the hyperlink so the audience is able to go search for more recipes on their own. I believe by adding more recipe examples and a website, the audience will be able to get more out of it. They can research on their own what recipes they want to try, and just by adding those links, I was able to help them along their fitness journey. I also added numbers before each major step was about to be talked about. I believe this is an easier way for my readers to navigate through the page and find each step. If they were to actually use my post to try their own meal prep, the numbers will help them indicate what step they are on next. I believe these edits have made my overall final copy a lot stronger and easier to read.
Blog #2 Draft
Blog #3 Commentary- Apps That You Can Call Your Best Friends
My first edit I made on this blog #3 was the title. I corrected "you" to "your", Other than that, this blog post was about different apps that I use to help me along my fitness journey. I spent a lot of time on the first draft, and believe I established a strong base. However, there were a few tweaks I made to make the post even stronger. I made the name of the apps even larger so they stand out while reading (MyFitnessPal and Fooducate). At the end of the post, I also added hyperlinks to all the other apps I suggest to the audience to download. I made the font purple and larger so it stand out more. I think by adding the hyperlinks and adding color to the other app examples make it easier to read, and easier for the audience to navigate!